How to describe the perfect kissing scene

As with most things nowadays, there are even “user manuals” for kissing scenes available online.

I have been reading through quite some of them and created a list that seems to work for me:

 

  1. Where does the kissing take place?
  2. What is the occasion?
  3. What can I do to increase the tension?
  4. Description of the body reaction
  5. End of the kiss

 

 

Let me explain my list a little more detailed:

 

  1. Where?

–       Describe the scenery

–       Are they at an event?

–       Are they surrounded by others?

–       Are they alone?

–       What is around them?

–       A park?

–       A romantic pavilion?

–       A living room, a kitchen, an elevator?

 

  1. Occasion?

–       How many times have they met before?

–       Is it happening on a date?

–       If yes, is it the second date? The third one?

–       Do they know each other well, or are they just about to get closer?

–       Is it a kiss at an anniversary?

 

  1. Increase the tension?

–       Describe how they get closer

–       Describe the closing of the distance

–       Is either one of them closing the distance on their accord?

–       Add some tension and ‘electricity’ to the scene

 

  1. Describe how their bodies react?

–       Talk about how they touch each other

–       Describe how their skin reacts

–       Tell the reader how they smell and taste

–       Give details how they see each other

–       Do they close their eyes?

–       What do they hear?

–       How do their lips feel?

–       Do their tongues play with each other?

 

  1. End of the kiss

–       How do they separate?

–       Do they regret the kiss is over?

–       What did the kiss with their feelings and emotions?

–       How are they getting a certain distance between them again?

 

Now, let’s see what we can do with this list and create a kiss-scene without boring the reader to death:

 

Annabelle was surprised to see Rick had taken her to an open-air concert of her favorite band. She had longed to see this band playing, but she never felt a rock concert being the epitome of a romantic date. Even more, she was taken aback to realize he had bought tickets directly at the stage. The hustle in the front rows would be enormous. The beaming and sparkling of his eyes kept her away from protesting. He seemed happy to have surprised her. The crowd around them surrounded them with noise and heat. Even though she only wore a t-shirt and a thin jacket, there was no chance she could get cold. Rick held her hand to avoid losing her. The concert was epic, and Annabelle’s hand was always held by Rick’s he held her by his side until the band played one of their rare ballads. Surrounded by fans who were jumping and applauding Annabelle felt her face suddenly pressed against Rick’s muscular chest. She took a deep breath. He smelled like honey and chocolate. She had taken a few secret whiffs before and had already thought, if the perfume industry would wish to increase their turnovers, they should have bottled Rick’s smell.

His shirt felt soft on her face, and she couldn’t resist rubbing her cheek on his strong chest, only a little bit. There was a lot of movement around them; eventually, he wouldn’t realize what she did. “What are you doing, Sweetie?” His dark voice murmured into her ear.

It sent a sweet shudder down her spine, and she lifted her face to look at him. His right hand on her hip pulled her closer while his left hand supported her neck and jaw line.

Her entire body length was pressed against his strong frame; her breasts felt nearly flattened. But she did not move, did not want to move. His hot skin nearly burned her own. Her arms and hands found their way underneath his jacket, grabbing fists full of fabric while her entire body screamed in the desire to get even closer.

Rick’s ice blue eyes held her gaze, and he lowered his face to hers.

For only the fraction of a second, his mouth brushed her lower lip, like the touch of butterfly wings. In a sigh Annabelle uttered the almost inaudible sound of a kitten, desperately wanting more. The next touch on her lip was the tender caress of his tongue. Annabelle’s soft lips parted and she let Rick’s demanding tongue touching her own, searching her limits playfully, but she did not feel like limiting him. She let herself sink deeper into this kiss and allowed her tongue to dance vividly with Ricks.

All music, noise, the people around them, disappeared in a whirl, it seemed they were alone in this place. Nothing was important than to taste the sweetness of Ricks lips and tongue. She did not realize the ballad had ended, and they both were displayed on the grand monitor onstage.

Only when the clapping and applauding got more regular and grew whooping, her consciousness focused again onto the present, and she realized where she was. She felt Ricks smile on her lips, and she buried her embarrassed pink face in his shirt.

There was no room to separate her body from his, and Rick wouldn’t have permitted it. He held her close in his arms, and she felt more than she heard his laughter.

 

(Copyright, March 2016, Aurora Jean Alexander)

 

Of course, this is only a try to describe a Kiss scenery “out of nowhere”. It might even be far from being perfect. After all, we haven’t read all about Annabelle and Rick’s relationship. But I think we might have gotten at least an idea of how far this relationship has already developed.

It was fun to introduce you to Annabelle and Rick. If you have an idea on how to pattern this kiss differently, I’d love to read it in the comments.

Or: do you have your list of how to build a kissing scene? It would be interesting to see it.

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Black And White Toy – a riddle

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*****

Tall and fluffy, sweet and cute

To kids he is the perfect hoot.

Moving slow, but smart and clever

He can’t be drawn in colors ever.

 

**

Mom’s are not tender, but quite hard

They raise their kids, educational and smart.

Even though babies are tiny at birth

With 18 months they know what they’re worth.

**

 

Unimpressed by meat who knew,

they’re eating plants, trees and bamboo.

They’re Asian, still their eyes are round

They can swim and climb but live on the ground

**

When they eat, they use to sit

They move deliberate when they flit.

However cute they’re still quite strong

And can be dangerous, don’t get it wrong.

**

They don’t sleep when it gets cold

They just move lower, they’re that bold.

Their habitat shrinks, it’s sadly linked

that they might soon become extinct.

 

**

If humans don’t give them huge advance

This cuddly friend won’t stand a chance,

to survive on Earth equal and fair;

Our black and white, beautiful Panda Bear.

*****

(Copyright, March 2016, Aurora Jean Alexander)

 

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All about reviews

If there’s something I, as a new and hopefully soon published author, are scared of, it is a low or bad book review. Here we got support how to handle Mean Book Reviews.

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7 Tips to Create Your Perfect Author Newsletter

Sacha Black provides us with seven excellent tips to create the perfect author newsletter. Thank you very much for your great post, Sacha!

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Author NewsletterI hear parrots squawking the same mantra constantly: “Hear Ye! Hear Ye! The best way to drive book sales is through a subscriber list.”

Its that thing where you: create a newsletter, do book updates, bonus content and give your hard work away for free.

If you got books to sell, you need that list.

This made me do one of those gut busting groans. Seriously? I spend enough time writing posts instead of my novel, do I actually have to add something else to my seven hundred and forty-eight page to do list?

Apparently I do, and that means you do too.

I heard that message loud and clear, especially as I’ll be releasing books this year. So I made a subscriber list one of my goals and I’ve been busy rolling up my ‘bonus content’ sleeves. Finally I’ve created one and it’s ready and chock full of just that: bonus content, round ups, writers tools, recommendations, writing inspiration…

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A new book based on classic characters – does that work?

Quite some time ago I finished reading “Rhett Butler’s People,” a sequel of “Gone with the Wind, written by Donald McCaig and I was disappointed.

 

Like many other romantic readers, I had waited for a continuation of this story when Scarlett, who had just discovered her love to Rhett would find him again and they both get together into a “heart-exploding-soul-warming-smile-magic-star-raining” Happy End.

 

I think the more modern language the book has been written in had taken me the ‘gusto’ of the history within the story. Besides: I had been a huge fan of Rhett and the life he adjusted to during his time “after Scarlett” confused me. He was described as a free spirit, and may it as it was, but I had to re-think my liking for him.

I am only expressing my opinion at this point. Some other readers might not share my taste at all and will be enthusiastic about this book. But to me, it wasn’t the right thing. 

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I started thinking. A new book, based on classic characters. Could this ever work? We read the original, and we love it. Why would we love another story, written by another author? Could this work? Would we recognize the characters? Wouldn’t’ the new novel only be a weak copy of what we loved?

 

A while later I got another book recommended. “The Phantom,” written by Susan Kay. In this book the author had chosen to write about an existing character: The Phantom of the Opera, written by French author Gaston Leroux early last century. As compared to taking the story any further, which was hardly possible since Leroux’ story ends with the protagonist’s death, Susan Kay has developed the past for the Phantom of the Opera. She showed the protagonists parentage, early child- and manhood. In a way, it is more a “completion” to Gaston Leroux’ story which describes more or less the last few months in the Phantom’s life.

Susan Kay writes vividly, interestingly and webs a fascinating past around the man. I am a huge fan of this book and would recommend it to everyone.

 

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I as well read “Mr. Darcy Presents His Bride”, a book written by Helen Halstead. It tells the story of Jane Austin’s Elizabeth Bennett and Mr. Darcy. I like the book and think it is a cute sequel. There are a few sentences that are not formally written with the expressions one would expect, and the plot isn’t a plot but it is more like the soft dabble, caused by a series of occurrences, but it is nevertheless to me a charming story with characters we were once introduced to by Jane Austen.

 

 

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These two examples show me that it is possible to write a novel, using characters which had arisen from another authors’ fantasy. Whether the original author of the book would recognize his characters again or had ever planned on having them developed in a particular direction is a different matter.

 

What books have you been reading that contained other authors characters? Did you like the book? As an author, what is your opinion about basing a novel on another author’s characters? If you could chose characters to write a novel about, who would you pick?

I’d be curious to hear your thoughts. Thank you so much.

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